The shortest poem in the world:

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    FLEAS

    Adam Had 'em.
     
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    My grandfather had a bag full of those little poems - I forget most of them now. He used to drive me crazy at bed time when I would ask him to tell me a story :D
     
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    I would never read poetry at all - except E.A.P. but your poem was short, to the point and did not confuse. Though I do not feel fulfilled from your words, it is comforting to know that Adam no longer has fleas...whoever he may be.
     
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    It's brilliant. It implies a central actor,Adam, who had a conflict, having fleas versus a presumed desire to not have fleas, and a successful resolution, he no longer has them. Classic single goal story structure, but we all know the 9 point double reveal is statistically the best way to have a blockbuster, now don't we.
     
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    Like I said, it's brilliant and leaves room for flashback sequel that fills in the holes:

    "Tatum ate 'em. "
     

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