The killer stalked the murky late night streets intent on seeking her next victim. The thrill and obsession of the hunt was like a insatiable hunger that burned deep in her psyche. The screams and struggles of her prior victims resonated like a symphony through her thoughts as she stopped at the corner of a busy wind swept street. The downtown area was a lush hunting ground for this mistress of death.
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Gee-whiz.
A little too descriptive is it not. Seems like the melodramatic went overboard. Adjectives abound.
I am on my second book that I am writing. I am trying to have the characters discuss and talk.......more than just simple paragraphs that you find in some books ; where the characters do not talk for four or five pages.
A book is a story, let the characters tell the story. I do not like to read four to six pages of paragraphs that is just garbled talk that the author put in just to make their page count higher. I like for my books to be a movie on pages......where the characters tell the events and story line. The characters.......ARE THE BOOK, and I like for the reader to be interested in my characters. Characters that the reader can picture in their minds - their attitude, demeanor - intellect - ability. What they feel, what they see and what they hear. How they are dressed, where they are going and where they have gone. Characters tell the story, and the story should be simple.
I add power words to my book ; but not every sentence. I don't use language that where it would take a Harvard or a Yale Grad to figure it out. I don't set down to write, just to be writing.....I take pride in the books I write ; and as of now......am very proud of them. I have completed my first book ; and am about 50 or so pages into my second book. I don't type to type, I research, think and plan ahead ; then put it on the computer screen - and I still find myself editing or fine tuning.
My plan......is to keep the reader interested. I want them to read the book, and see a portion inside the book, not wanting to put it down....because they want to see what happens next - who goes where ; or how does the outcome of this particular secion of the book turnout.
Books are supposed to be fun to read - the reader as if they were there living the events themselves. The characters in the book are actually surrounding the reader ; the reader can feel their breath. Fun - suspense - downtimes and tragedy. Laugh, cry, root for and suspense in how it will turn out - this is what a book is supposed to be.
I read a David Kilcullen book on Counter-Insurgency awhile back. He wrote it like he was doing a presentation for a Masters Class in college. Fancy terms, complicated sentences......like he was wanting to prove to his readers he was educated. He tried too hard - his book was informative...but boring and dull. He wrote the book, like he was an over educated idiot.
Books are read by teens in high school, all the way to retired adults. Speak on their level. Keep the reader interested. Make the book enjoyable and fun to read, not complicated
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I'll have to give it some thought and make a contribution later on when I have some extra time.
