Uhhh More Poems

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  1. JOKER96BRAVO
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    I wrote this like 10 years ago!!!
    I'm not much of a Poet!!!

    Perfidious (look up the word perfidy)


    Wicked,... a temperate, sparkled, flash of dreams,
    A shattered piece of love.
    To see a star come crashing down,
    That's sent from up above.

    Pain,... unveil the strings around my heart,
    Unmask the troll within.
    A quest for love, a shallow start,
    A faction of the sin.

    Hurt,... the amber waves of guilt,
    Spilling over the white sands of sorrow.
    It leaves a stagnate, sinful silt,
    And nothing feels so hollow.

    Burn,... exposed, the truth.... it lies,
    A leftist to the grith.
    A blinding smoke, scorch the eyes,
    A friction comes there with.

    Lost,... amongst a veil of mist,
    A rancid act indeed.
    To scorn the heart with just one kiss,
    The planting of the seed.

    Rage,... against the flames about,
    A madness to the wind.
    To turn, and twist a disordered route,
    Which none has ever been.

    Reckless,... a vagrant soul of strife amiss,
    A curious act indeed.
    To scorn the heart with just one kiss,
    The planting of the seed.

    Wicked,... a temperate, sparkled, flash of life,
    And nothing is what it seems.
    She calms the reckless soul of strife,
    And lives only in my dreams.

    ~JOKER~
     
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    Is anyone good at analyzing poetry???
    Cause I would like to know if this has some twisted hidden meaning
    like dreams do.
     
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    Uh.. Sounds to me like you got burned bad once, and that now you still think there's someone else out there that's better than who you have now...

    But..who knows.. I'm just a girl - we're capable of twisting anything around.
     
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    I wrote the poem a long time ago, and I was inspired by a song my band did.

    The song was about a man who was obsessed with a girl and kidnapped her
    and tied her up in a high floor level of a skyscraper. He planned on shooting
    her because of rejection, and at the last minute he decided to jump out the
    window.

    Some of this can be referenced in the poem, but like I said,
    I was only inspired by the song. The words just came to me.
     
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    I read it a couple times it sounds like the pain of betrayal combined with a nicotine/smoking addiction.
     

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