Sure...
First - you started the video with "Good Morning"...then after the promo, the first thing you said was "tonight we...". Just sayin...
On the topic, single sentence. I would say you are about right. Pretty much the summary was "everything is awesome, you have me to thank for it"
But then you went into vague rhetorical statements about liberalism etc.
Nothing of any real value.
How about saying - "the economy is great Mr. President? Economy is growing the fastest in 10 years? The markets have doubled?"...well who has benefited from this amazingness that we all seem to be missing?" "Answer? - since 2008 the top 7% wage earners have cashed in an unbelievable 33% earnings increase!! Whahooo!!...but what about the rest of us? The other 93% of people WHO HAVE JOBS?? Ohhh...we are not doing so well are we sir? Yeah...a 5% decline in earnings. In fact, isn't it true Mr. President that the earnings gap between the wealthy and the middle class is what is really growing faster in the past ten years."
You can't male points with rhetorical "liberals are all dumb" stuff...just simply tell the truth, it is far more damning.