Don't Laugh too hard

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    Ok guys try not to laugh too hard, I am not an artistic person, rather a very technical one. I wanted to try my hand at a simple poem so I started with something I feel very strongly about.


    A mother and her baby


    The Mom:


    Sitting alone out in the cold
    staring at the full moon
    She thought about the news
    why did it happen so soon?

    Though she knows she is not alone
    this “thing” with her small and mild
    She knows that “it” shouldn’t be
    she's just not ready for a child.

    She's sure she needs to get rid of it
    that’s where she's going tomorrow
    To free herself from this nightmare
    so she'll no long have this sorrow

    There’s nothing any one can tell her
    to make her change her mind
    They try and convince her to keep it
    but tomorrow she will leave it behind

    Then she can carry on with her life
    still living life young and free
    Although she’ll think to herself
    there’ll be no child with me…


    The Baby:


    Thank you so much for giving me
    this chance of a life of my own
    Even in these last few days
    so much bigger I have grown

    I’m getting used to living with you
    I know I’ll be happy on this earth
    I’m so lucky to have a mom like you
    I can’t wait to see you at my birth

    But mom there’s one thing I’ve noticed
    over these last couple of days
    Tell me if there’s something wrong
    you’ve been acting in different ways

    You haven’t been very careful with me
    I’m really sorry to complain
    But when you hit your tummy like that
    it causes me a lot of pain

    I hope you’ll be better when I arrive
    and I know we’ll have so much fun
    Please stop worrying it will be all right
    I just want you to be happy, mom!
     
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    That was touching, and sad. Good piece of writing. Puts a nice touch on the baby that is never talked to before a woman decides to end his/her life. :(

    Very good, Eric!
     
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    Thanks Jim, I hope you are just not being kind.:)
     
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    Not at all. Having a child of your own and watching them grow certainly changes your views. You brought things out from a different angle, and angle I haven't thought of before. It would seem that the baby always gets lost in the abortion arguments.
     
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    I don't have any children yet, and I think about this everyday, and it hurts me to know how people who are blessed with children could care less.
     
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    Very beautiful Eric....:clap:

    Children are so special..and make me feel something special inside..to see them play & laugh...They truely are a blessing..and miracle....Life is wonderful....nice to see you have a heart buddy...:)...Good wriiting,and very much enjoyed.....(pat on the back)!!
     
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    Keep trying...you'll get your miracle!!!...I'll send a prayer your way..:)
     
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    Eric - a copy of this should be posted in every abortion clinic in the world. Great writing!
     
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    Sincerely, thank you all. I almost deleted it after I posted. LIke I said I have never been artistic in any way and really was afraid to try.

    And George, thank you for a prayer, I am tired of living for myself, I want to have a more important purpose in this life and I can not think of one more rewarding than shaping the mind and soul of a child, or children for that matter, and then watching them grow. I would not even hesitate to adopt, to me it really would not make a big difference, I don't have that macho feeling that the child has to be from my blood.

    Thanks again guys
     
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    ...I'm just like you Eric...I can hold any child,and love it as my own....it's the love,and the care one gives..that makes it grow...:)....Before I always wondered would I want a boy..or girl...no matter,because they are both more precious than gold...:)

    That's almost a poem too...(smile)....you rubed off on me!!

    Alota kids need a good dad & mum.....It's love that makes this world go round....(happy feeling inside)!!!....Thanks...for the thanks....(handshake)!!
     

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