THE ROAD OF LIFE poem

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    Way back in the sixties I saw a painting hanging in my friends apartment in Berkley. The painting was done in a monotone color of green. I recall, as I was looking at it that it is the road of life!

    THE ROAD OF LIFE

    THE ROAD OF LIFE IS AS THAT,
    WHICH I HAVE SEEN.
    WHO BUT PAINTED THIS.....
    I DO NOT KNOW.
    BUT THERE WAS A ROAD,
    AND MANY STROLLED ALONG ITS WAY.
    SOME HAND IN HAND.......
    AND SOME ALONE. AND THIS ROAD HAD MANY TURNS, WITH LAMPS TO LIGHT THE WAY. AND ON EACH SIDE WAS THE SEA....
    AND NOW AND THEN A FOG
    COULD BE SEEN.
    THE ROAD WAS LONG.....
    SO VERY LONG.
    AS IF TO STRETCH TO ETERNITY
    AND SO DID VANISH
    AT HORIZON AND SEA.
    AND WHAT OF THEY......
    WHO WALK THIS ROAD?
    FOR THERE IS THE FOG......
    AND SO MANY TURNS......
    AND SO THERE ARE SOME WHO LOOSE THEIR WAY SOME FALL OFF.........
    AND OTHERS GO ASTRAY
    BUT, WHAT IS THIS FOG....,
    THAT BLINDS THEIR WAY?
    PERHAPS THEY HAVE QUARRELED.....
    AND GO SO FAR ASTRAY.
     
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    I like this for its evocation of a journey. Thx for sharing. I might say, however, that the ending needs reconsideration. It sorta just dangles. While this might represent the on going journey and how there are arrivals and no destinations, you might need to tie together the threads of the poem up a bit more?
     
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    Robert Frost
    (1874–1963)

    I met this guy in 1959.

    Didn't have a clue who he was, but the adults that day made me pretend to care that I was meeting him, like he was some kind of big deal or something.

    I think, he has potential to become a fairly good poet, don't you?
     
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    amiam does show potential as a poet. I thought of Robert Frost and that poem as I read amiam's and shunted the echoes to one side so I could better see what this poet offered. To write from the vision given in a painting takes imaginative talent.:clap2:
     

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