it's almost like having you here

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    when the storms and wind howl and the dog and cats growl,
    it's almost like having you here
    when you say what you mean but you don't mean a thing
    ergo what is ever to fear?

    this thread is for impromptu poetry that just pops in and out of your head. nothing serious... also, put stuff here that's "in process" - unfinished stuff you can come back, scoop up, revise, play, until you put in finished form here or anywhere you like.

    its name? oh, the first time i heard that silly song "i'm so miserable without you it's almost like having you here," and i laughed till i almost cried, to think someone could say something so funny about somebody else... so i thought it would make a good ice-breaker for anyone with the wild hare notion that poetry has to be contrived or purposeful. it can be anything, really, so just ...

    let there be fun here ....
     
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    Here I sit all broken hearted,
    Came to poop but can't get started...
     
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    the ravishing colors of fall are now parting
    bare branches are showing their scars
    skies covered in ashen foam edges to zenith
    woodpeckers, their black and white bars

    berries have faded and fallen in cane mazes
    dead bush grass concealing new growth
    scrutinizing snake eyes' predatory gazes
    under foot, could not be more loathe
     
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    Laying scatological thoughts on others at Christmas time is your idea of poetic score?
    I guess I'm old fashioned, because I think offensive stuff should stay permanently behind the bathroom door.
     
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    midcan5 liberal / progressive

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    Get Real

    Ever have someone tell you
    get real
    what is real
    grow up
    to where
    ah come on you know
    I don't
    start thinking
    thought I was
    I give up
    on what
    you
    please try harder
    hm
    OK
     
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    Kree!
     
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    either the egret's wings underneath were black and dark
    or else I saw none other than a quickly fleeting stork

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    photo credits

    I just can't make up my mind. The trouble with birdwatching is that sometimes, you get a glimpse before it swoops behind a tree, never to be seen again. Egrets are highly graceful birds, but when I read a description of storks, in flight they are said to be graceful also. It seemed I saw the tell-tale dark wing tips (similar to the stork pictured), but I can't say for sure, because I only noticed it for a fraction of a second before the holly tree obfuscated it completely. Storks are not usual visitors here, but they are not unknown, either. I'm giving it a 70% chance it was a stork, though. Shadows underneath egret wings are just not that black even in diffuse lighting that we have on a cloud-covered day.
     
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    I'll refrain from posting my limericks about Nantucket. :D
     
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    So YOU'RE the notorious ...
    :rolleyes:
     
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    I prefer the term "infamous".
     

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