Emptiness

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    Emptiness surrounds me
    It surrounds my room, it surrounds my heart
    How much can it take before it breaks apart

    Is it there, do I want too much

    What if everything is right here
    Yet I'm out looking
    Where do I go from here

    It's always a new day
    But it remains the same
    Always stuck in the same game

    When do you leave, when do you stay
    When to take a chance and when to pray

    I want out of the game, no longer want to play

    Is the best yet to come
    Or has it slipped on past me
    Whats the odds of me, becoming we

    Is it my fault or is it fate
    How much longer need I wait

    Will she be waiting for me at the gate?
     
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    Jesus Jim - it's a gloomy damn night as it is, that just added to it!!! :( Hope this isn't what your feeling? maybe you need a night out! Jackass, where are you????

    Excellent writing though!!!!!!!
     
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    Don't worry, you'll find the right one and sooner than you think. ;)
     
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    VERY good.
    Hope those are just words.
     
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    **wipes tear**

    :(
     
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    Cheer up. The Steelers won...again.
     
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    Jim, I hope that was cathartic for you, and you feel lighter now.

    And if that was the pain medication talking, can I have some??
     
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    Hell Bonnie, he had the good stuff too, Viacoden!!!!!!!!!! :mm:
     
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    Jim, maybe you could begin a career as a country/western songwriter. That almost sounds like a Hank Williams song.
     

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