A Poem: America is for Americans

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    "America is for Americans"

    by Captain Steel (penname)

    I don't need no more "guests", fucking up my nation,
    they're ruining my country, with their immigration,
    they refuse to speak the language, they refuse to integrate,
    they have no respect for us at all, with us they won't relate,
    instead of waiving red, white, and blue, they waive red, white, and green,
    fifteen people, crammed in one house, it's just fucking obscene,
    they're taking all our jobs, and they drive the wages down,
    they invade our neighborhoods, leaving shopping carts all around,
    they're getting MediCal, they're getting section 8,
    welfare, food stamps, and unemployment, they're always willing to take,
    they work under the table, they contribute not a buck,
    and people wonder why, our economy's so fucked!,
    every year they're sending billions, from here to Mexico,
    it's just like dropping all that cash, into a big black hole,
    they put out their own newspapers, radio, and TV,
    "Pura Raza" radio, sounds pretty racist to me!,
    MECHA, MALDEF, and LA RAZA, their racist organizations,
    yet they claim we're the racists, if we try any retaliation,
    of these facts, the mainstream media, refuses to report,
    and the INS, has had it's hands tied, the illegals they can't deport,
    if things don't change real soon, America is doomed,
    our future is a turd-world nation, our citizens filled with gloom,
    we need our troops to patrol the line, and the seal the Mexican border,
    but that will never happen, with Bush taking Fox's every order!,
    Bush is giving worker amnesty to llegals, he's sold America out!,
    selling out his own country, for the prospect of votes, is what he's all about,
    I've nothing personal against hispanics, it's not a racial deal,
    but America is for Americans, that's the way I feel,
    Borders, Language, Culture to keep America strong,
    the mexicans....they don't belong!!
    you have your own damn home, so stay there!, and I'll stay here in mine,
    and as long as we do just that, everything should work out jusssttt fine......
     
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    If you aren't 100% native american, your poem is :bs:
     
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    You have nothing wrong with hispanics, as long as they stay the hell out of the US. Good point.:rolleyes:
     
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    It's like this: If ALL the MEXICANs were to just stay in Mexico I would honestly wish them the best fuckin life they could possibly live. It's not like I would want to travel down there and harass or assualt them in any way. I would wish them the best. AS LONG as they stay there.

    Anyways, are we critiquing the poem or the subject of the poem itself? This IS writing skills forum, not political...:cool:
     
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    The Native Americans days owning America are over....What the hell do you want us to do? Give the whole country back? I'm talking about right now...not hundreds of years ago. My message to you is: GET REAL!!
     
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    that's what they said about the Irish immigrants...and the asian immigrants...and the italian immigrants....you know....ALL THE PEOPLE WHO BUILT THIS COUNTRY!!!!!!!!
     
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    Exactly. The only minorities I've ever felt a bit of 'qualms' about were the Native Americans, they got screwed and the Blacks, they got really screwed. Now, it's done with, no going back, time to move on.
     
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    all of em got screwed at one time or another...the asians building the railroads...the irish weren't able to vote, despite their numbers, for a long time....the jews...well I think we all know about their problems....but right now the mexicans make up a HUGE and important sector of our economy....jobs that we won't do and they do well and deserve credit for....and their work is putting a lot of tax money into the fund....and they are super great people if you will climb down from your racist hierarchy and engage them in conversation...
    the language is a problem....I used to work at the adult literacy center in Greenwood teaching mexican adults english....they want to learn it but they work so much they don't always have time...and a lot of the kids work instead of school so they don't learn it....and the teachers at the schools aren't skilled at teaching spanish speakers english..understandably....I guess people like me just have to try harder.....
     
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    I think you need LIFE advice more than you need writing skills advice.

    My suggestion, show all of this stuff to your counselor/psychiatrist/mom/dad...
     
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    Ah, you are right, in the sense that being an immigrant here has always been hard, but the Irish, (of which I'm one), the Jews, The Mexicans, (ok might be a close call on this one via 19th C), Chinese, etc., we all CAME HERE, willingly. Not matter how hard, it was a good sight better than where we left.
     

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